Awakening day (Tsuzuki or...?)

Violetstar42 · Joined: 30 Jan 2007 Posts: 10 Location: USA

Hello, this Violetstar42 here I don't know if you all saw my post yet introducing myself but I appear to be the newest member here and I carry a lot of interesting facts with me. Anyway, I am a poetry writer too which I had not mentioned it is freeverse not always ryming. I basically listen to a song in(mostly Japanese songs) and I write whatever comes out of my mind with my keyboatf. Some of my poemsI swear are not written by me. This poem is dark and most likly provactive.

Here, it is., I hope the line spacing does not annoy you **^_^;*

Awakening Day

You’d never really think that

I’d ever find the perfect mask for me.

And you never trust that

There will ever be history for me.

Do you think I should be angry or sad?

What is that escape route that you have kept secret for centuries?

Come on tell me.

As if,

Everyone trusts me

So turn me over,

And watch me fall.

Chocolates,

Candy,

Love,

Death,

Suicide,

Confession

I chomp on these human treats.

Trying to escape into something that’s not mine.

Isn’t that right?

No one likes me anymore.

They take their time building up something false.

Living the day

I shall have for me.

No one knows me anymore.

Forgetting is only human

And so is despair.

No one will forget me

I want to think I’m human.

Don’t you?

I’ve spent years building up

What you now see.

Pretty, isn’t it?

So, if you love that piece of glass.

I give it to you.

Your/ true /love.

Truth and lies are not real anyway

So why do you hold on to them?

Insanity is only in the eye of the human.

The sand in their hourglasses dies out to fast.

No more holding on to something

Never grasped in the beginning

Everything you see

Is not what it appears to be.

Do you have the eyes to see it?

As if,

You always trust me,

So turn me over

And watch me awaken.

If you are so scared

Are you worthy to it all?

Do you really know me?

If I were to show you you’d probably brake.

Through all the intesneity

Is believing being?

I’ve heard humans say.

Only until that day,

Hold on to it, don’t get involved.

You never want it.

Chocolates,

Candy,

Love,

Death,

Suicide,

Confession

I chomp on these human treats.

Trying to escape into something that’s not mine.

Isn’t that right?

You try to tell me

Nd I seem to belivede

If you want to,

Look again.

But you won’t like what you see.

Autohr's opininos: I originallly said I want ot write another poem anbout Tsuzuki, however this will not be my pioem, it will go deepe than myself...
I thought with the first twow lines it was about Tsuzuki but I was not sure, the more and more I wrote and read the more freaked out I became. All author's have works that appear to be a brink of insanity, maybe that's what tihs is... no something else?

Please comment, I want to know what others (bbesides my boyfriend say)

Note: My boyfriend said he was suprised that I wrote what he called 'such a work of litterature' about Tszuki.

I had written one poem about him before from my opinion nbut this one is quite different, Ah, please comment, try not to falme but you can critsize a bit, also if you think it sounds like a chara from YnM tell me which one, I have afeeling I will be visitng this section a lot....

Oh wll,

Sankyuu!

~Viioletstar42

P.S. Please respect my litterature
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(Anothe quote form the same work of litterature) "What is that escape route that you have kept secret for centuries?" ~Violetstar42

admin · Site Admin Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 1008

I initially thought Tsuzuki, but then it seemed like more was going on then it simply being Tsuzuki angsting, I think maybe a specific side of Tsuzuki is speaking here, a side he keeps hidden, who knows (I'm not good at these things). But overall, a very good piece of work.

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