Beating Fakeness (by Coco)

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admin · Site Admin Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 1008

Here's a small YnM poem:

Beating Fake

I feel sad
Dropped my cake
Oh-now I'm glad
Let's act fake
Dance around
Big fat grin
Hide the darkness
Strong within

Feel it grow
Guilt with time
Dying so
I will lie
Dropped my cake
Oh-now I'm glad
Let's act fake
Dance around

Stop to see
I feel a hit
A look of knowing
As I sit

Stop it says
I feel the green
And it calms me
Though it's mean
I will lie!!!
Dropped my cake
Oh-now I'm glad

I see him shake

Stop to see
I feel a hit
His look of knowing
Makes me sit

I don't bother
I leave my cake
Not a smile
Won't act fake

Instead I sit
Cut by green
And all the things
It has seen

I hear a sound
Drop my cake
I try and found
I Can't be fake
''In the darkness we will lie''
I hear a cry
But not alone
He grips me hard
"but side by side"
This he has shown

Beating fake

by Coco

Its not great but it's a little something, I have tons more on my site here: http://www.freewebs.com/coco_melancholy/Extra1.htm

~Coco

pyro_o · Posted: Mon Jul 31, 2006 2:42 pm Post subject:

Oh. My. God..

that was BEAUTIFUL.

I just joined this forum and the first thing I read is THIS.. T___T
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admin · Site Admin Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 1008

Thanks a bunch I'm very flattered. I felt I might try my hand at doing a nicer poem since all my other poems are cruel and rude piss takes of the characters and I guess I felt a bit guilty. So I tried this, though it's still a bit rough around the edges.

~Coco

pyro_o · Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 2:13 pm Post subject:

LOL

I'll make sure to adapt one of my xanga posts to poetry and write it here. XD

I'll SO put you to shame. LOL jkjkjkjk but still~

very pretty. =D
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Whispers of a Ghost · Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 1:25 am Post subject:

Wow. I loathe fan poetry, but this was pretty good.

You actually made a fan poem I liked. You pwn the intarwebs. Razz

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admin · Site Admin Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 1008

Really?? Wow, thank you very much. I think I might even add one from my website here. I'm really grateful for your comments. Maybe whispers of a ghost should try posting one too if she's unsatisfied with fan poetry. I myself hardly see it so I little opinion on it.

~Coco

Whispers of a Ghost · Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 2:42 am Post subject:

Meh, I'm afraid that it'll suck royally. But I'll try it out, maybe, if I ever get off my lazy ass. Razz

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pyro_o · Posted: Wed Aug 02, 2006 6:56 pm Post subject:

*giggle* I owe you a poem for this, coco-chan. I really do. =D
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laustic · Joined: 09 Jul 2006 Posts: 660 Location: Florida

That was a beautiful poem. You did such a wonderful job.

admin · Site Admin Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 1008

Thank you very much, I think it could have been done better but it was very spontaneous I was just thinking about Tsuzuki's fakeness and how it might effect Hisoka, I was worried it wouldn't even make sense.

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