Mur/Tsu fan-fiction here!

Chazmy · Posted: Thu Jul 26, 2007 10:33 pm Post subject: Mur/Tsu fan-fiction here!

For all your Mur/ Tsu obsession and sense I don't see much of them around I am going to post some of my fiction here

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Chazmy · Posted: Thu Jul 26, 2007 10:37 pm Post subject:

Title: No Return to Innocence

Rated: NC-17

Summary: What happens after Tsuzuki loses the poker bet and Hisoka is not there to save him? boy x boy yaoi extremely voilent dark sexual themes!

{ Complete }

Link Here:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3206238/1/No_Return_to_Innocence
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Terrenea · Joined: 10 Apr 2007 Posts: 76 Location: Sweden

Seems to be a wonderful story! <3
I don't think there is one mur/tsu-fan that ISN'T angry on Hisoka for getting in the way there.. Muraki won, fare and square! *pouts*

You should check up some things in ch. 1 though, hope you don't mind *whimper*:
-His violent eyes closed (you mean 'violet eyes', ne?)
-” Not quiet yet my beautiful prize.” ('quite')
-he seen that he was now ('sees', I think)
-his tormenter ('tormentor')(same again later on)
-his prizes anger ('prize's')
-It Amused him
-Muraki Licked the drip
-” How dose it taste?” ('does')
-hands grab ahold ('a hold')
-Doctors strengh ('Doctor's')
-tare into his belove ('tear into'..?)('beloved')
-seliva and blood ('saliva')
-Especial the ('Especially')
- disguest ('disgust')
-Muraki sits quitly ('quietly')
-hopes of agreeing (think 'agreement' is more suitable)
-what he plained ('planed')
-in the bed ('into the bed' ?)
-belove’s body ('beloved's')(some more later on)
-Muraki rubes ('rubs')
-his toys ('toy's')
-body seemes ('seems')
-now dosen’t ('doesn't')
-gently rubed ('rubbed')
-to lossen ('losen' but feels wrong to use that word..)
+ the punctuations

Chazmy · Posted: Fri Jul 27, 2007 1:32 am Post subject:

No, I don't mind at all Thank You. I'm so bad with grammer and spelling Sad

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Terrenea · Joined: 10 Apr 2007 Posts: 76 Location: Sweden

I'm like that myself with my own work. ^^
And once again; nice story! Very Happy

Chazmy · Posted: Sat Jul 28, 2007 4:38 am Post subject:

Thank You again! I do have the sequel

Title: Forever Mine

Rated: NC-17

Summary:The Sequel to No Return to Innocence!THE FINAL CHAPTER!Sometimes drowning your sorrow in alcohol just isn't enough! Warning story contains:sexual themes and violence! not for the weak!

{ Complete }

Link Here:

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3244036/1/Forever_Mine

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Chazmy · Posted: Sun Nov 04, 2007 5:32 pm Post subject:

Title: A Dance with the Devil

Pairing: Tsuzuki/ Muraki

Gene: Drama/ Romance / Humor / Angst .

Rating: Nc-17 for later 'Lemon' scene's

Description: When things go terribly wrong in The Ministry of Hades. Tatsumi comes up with a brilliant idea on how to solve it. Little did they know that they would be auctioned off. What could a simple dance really lead in to.

Statues: in progress

Chapter 3 part 2 is up. Dancing lessons 101

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/3613053/1/A_Dance_with_the_Devil
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Editor · Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 330

Quite slow today, only read first two chapters of "No Return to Innocence", I love melting rose, melting rose is very creative, I know that is the weirdest thing to picK out with all that mind fucking, *andjustplainfucking* going on, but, melting roses!! Dude!

Very, very dark, especially Tsuzuki's pain at the end and Muraki's obsession and lust for Tsuzuki's body, it came across very explicitly *anddamnrightcrepily* well, especially since you wrote a lot of the passion from Muraki's point of view. I liked Tsuzuki's few moments of weakness of considering Muraki's strange attachment to he's looks....*cough* you know...right before Muraki *cough* has he's way with him *cough*.....aaaaaaaanyway, looking forward to reading more!! I haven't read much MurTsu fic, (though I have written one O.o) so it was really fun to get into yours today. I'll probably swing between commenting here and on ffn. And keep it up!!
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Chazmy · Posted: Fri Dec 07, 2007 1:08 am Post subject:

OH which one? what is it called? I want to read it Very Happy

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Editor · Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 330

No Return to Innocence

I've been discussing more than reading today so when I next get the chance I'm gonna find out what happens.

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