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pyro_o

Joined: 31 Jul 2006 Posts: 1171
Location: somewhere over the Rainbow....
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Posted: Thu Nov 15, 2007 3:54 am Post subject: What's In A Name? |
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well, here I am. So long, farewell, something-like-that-I-don't-remember-the-rest... XD
something new. something old... (nothing borrowed, or blue.)
(..except maybe Tatsumi's eyes.)
well, here you have it. My somewhat-relatively new fic, that hopefully signals my return to odd forum home and such and such. :DDDD a set of vignettes on each and every (primary) cast character, and several minor ones for a total of eleven fics. I think I can manage eleven small ones. SMALL, being the key word here.
the first one.. well. yeah. my first inspiration, my first fic for this fandom in a long, long time, my first few lines that will probably give away the entire fic. but still.
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What's In A Name? (1/11)
Hisoka- it's a name that spills secrets, stays secretive, and becomes a secret, like a whisper of lace, like a soft touch of a finger tracing patterns on your cheek. It's the rustling of cloth, the waver of a fan, the grace of an arrow.
'Hisoka' is the name that, in English, had you known it, mean 'secret' in the intricate kanji that you trace over and over again, on your walls. 'Hisoka' is the word you know when you find that there is something to hide; nothing to hide- bad habits, old scars, magic spells that light up the night like a dying nightingale's cry.
The name that describes something indescribable, like a beauty so rare, so gentle, so damn beautiful it borders on unearthly ugliness. A shine, sheer like the spider webs catching dew that emanates from the thought of the name.
It's the name used for a lonely little boy, whisked into a dark corner like yesterday's trash; an innocent child too afraid to feel, when he's feeling other people's feelings. Feelings that serve to alienate, to ostracize, and Hisoka begins to become more of a secret, than a proud son.
It describes tears like a soft rainfall, water streaming down from a jailhouse beneath the feet of laughing humans who never forgot the fact that they had a son- a monstrous beast possessed by some unearthly power.
Hisoka, the name used to describe the little boy who was always left behind, forgotten.
And Hisoka cries. _________________ ♥ ☆ ♥ ☆ J ☆ I ☆ H ☆ Y ☆ E ☆ ♥ ☆ ♥
many thanks to Rhea, because she is the Goddess of Photoshop. 8D |
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laustic

Joined: 09 Jul 2006 Posts: 660
Location: Florida
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Posted: Thu Nov 15, 2007 10:54 pm Post subject: |
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| Wow, that was just lovely and the descriptions you used to describe the name Hisoka was perfect. |
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pyro_o

Joined: 31 Jul 2006 Posts: 1171
Location: somewhere over the Rainbow....
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Posted: Sat Nov 17, 2007 3:01 am Post subject: |
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What's In A Name? (2/11)
I'm not too tall. I'm not too short. I'm not too fat, I'm not too skinny. There's nothing wrong with me. I have black hair like the rest of you; I have knobbly knees, a bit, but Luka says I'll grow out of them.
So what's wrong with me?
I'm happy a lot. I smile- and Luka says that's a good thing, smiling. I smile a lot, I laugh a lot. Luka says I eat a lot, too- but she says it's okay, because I'm still growing.
Luka says she loves me. Why don't you?
I'm always hanging around, I'm always trying to make friends- so why don't you like me? I'm trying. I'm trying really, really hard, I am.
Why can't you at least say my name?
'Asato'. Why can't you say that? Why do call me 'demon'? Why do you ignore me when I talk, only to hit me, if I try to get closer to you?
I won't hurt you. I want to have friends, I want to play with you.
I want you to acknowledge me, so I know I'm real; so I know I'm human, and not some 'demon'. Luka says calling people that is mean.
Why won't you like me? I don't understand. I'm looking at it through my eyes, and you say I'm ugly, I'm a beast, I'm evil.
Why won't you like me? _________________ ♥ ☆ ♥ ☆ J ☆ I ☆ H ☆ Y ☆ E ☆ ♥ ☆ ♥
many thanks to Rhea, because she is the Goddess of Photoshop. 8D |
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laustic

Joined: 09 Jul 2006 Posts: 660
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Posted: Sat Nov 17, 2007 10:00 pm Post subject: |
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| That is so sad, but incredibly written. I can really feel Tsuzuki's pain. |
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Lady Nilamarthiel

Joined: 03 Dec 2007 Posts: 8
Location: Northern Michigan
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Posted: Wed Dec 05, 2007 7:17 am Post subject: |
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Oh, ouch ouch ouchouchouch. So very very beautiful, and ow. ;.; _________________
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Editor

Joined: 07 Jul 2006 Posts: 330
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Posted: Wed Dec 05, 2007 3:30 pm Post subject: |
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1st one:
Wow! Very pretty and poetic if sad fic. There are some gorgeous similies,
| Quote: | | like a whisper of lace, like a soft touch of a finger tracing patterns on your cheek |
| Quote: | | like the spider webs catching dew that emanates from the thought of the name. |
Was very eloquent and effective.
| Quote: | | a jailhouse beneath the feet of laughing humans |
And that line was a major ouch. Why are you so harsh to Hisoka JiHye.
I didn't know Hisoka's name meant secrect and I liked the concept for the fic.
2nd one:
I love how you display Tsuzuki's turmoil through he's confusion and desire to be accepted and the references to Luka really made it very touching to read. It's tragic because Tsuzuki's facing injustice through the eyes of somene who knows what is happening to them is wrong and thats probably worse than if he thought it was right as he happens to do in the series. That Tsuzuki once thought this way makes he's character seem all the more sad now. Thanks for sharing this with us. _________________
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pyro_o

Joined: 31 Jul 2006 Posts: 1171
Location: somewhere over the Rainbow....
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 3:04 am Post subject: |
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What's In A Name? (3/11)
You cannot possibly know me.
I am a magnificent creation of the gods- I am life, I am death, and I am the afterlife. I am the flower that blooms when the gardener sleeps, safe and warm in his bed. I begin to open my petals to the moon, unearthly and ethereal, golden as the rays of the sun that I shy away from.
I sit alone, I eat alone, I live alone, with no companionship- as it should be. Every rose has it's thorns, and I need mine, lest I become hurt by stayng too close.
I am the beautiful product of the union of Life and Death, and in my dreams, I see Heaven. I see Hell. I see that mysterious region that so many are afraid of, and I smile.
My long tresses make you laugh, my body makes you point and smirk. My expression never changes in the face of your adversity, at your laughter, at your ridicule.
But just you wait.
I'll aspire to be something that makes you so surprised, that you wouldn't dare put that great creature with my name. My creations of metal, of gears and sweat, they soothe me, they tell me of the legend I'll write.
Someday.
And then, it'll be my turn to laugh, bold as brass, bright as gold, a smile on my face like the shine in my hair, my teeth, my eyes.
Someday. You'll see. _________________ ♥ ☆ ♥ ☆ J ☆ I ☆ H ☆ Y ☆ E ☆ ♥ ☆ ♥
many thanks to Rhea, because she is the Goddess of Photoshop. 8D |
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laustic

Joined: 09 Jul 2006 Posts: 660
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Posted: Fri Dec 14, 2007 4:29 am Post subject: |
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| That's amazing piece of work. You have a realy beautiful way of writing. |
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Jani_chan

Joined: 23 Aug 2006 Posts: 2685
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Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 4:45 am Post subject: |
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| just wows. Your writing is full of feeling. wooows |
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Editor

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Posted: Sat Dec 22, 2007 6:08 pm Post subject: |
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| Jani_chan wrote: | | just wows. Your writing is full of feeling. wooows |
A simmering threatening kind that I really felt in this piece. Specially with all those 'you's' in there, *shudders*, wow.
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